英语高手来帮我看看这个自我介绍语法都哪错了，怎么改

1. a very beautiful ancient city 改为 a very beautiful historic city

2.I am open-minded,willing and have broad interests like climbing,movies,swmming,dance and so on ..改为
I am a open-minded girl, and i have broad interests like climbing,movies,swmming,dancing and so on .
dance用在这里不合适，应为dancing,下同

3.Generally speaking,I am a hard woking student especially do the thing I am interested in. 改为 Generally speaking,I am a hard woking student especially for what I am interested in.

4.Although I have broad interests in many aspects and grasp the essential knowledge of the major,but I think at present,I can do many things in a superficial level,but not be competent to do things professionally owing to lack of ample knowledge and ability.
去掉第一个but，后边I think at present,I can do many things in a shallow level,and I am not competent to do things professionally owing to lack of knowledge.

5.复试时考官更注重学生对所学专业的理解和以后的专业目标，所以建议面试时多谈一些对专业的理解以及所做过的项目和经历。

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